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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies ca make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples frm your own knowledge or experience.

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Parents
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 who send their offspring to non-government
schools
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 should not pay income tax and the government should help their children's education system. I totally agree with
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 statement and my
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 justification will come in
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 some relative examples. To commence with, families who pay high amounts of property in public
schools
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 should not pay any levy there are several reasons behind
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.
Firstly
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, they already contribute to their country's economy because they pay a high amount of pay in only education system which is beneficial for all sectors.
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, those offspring who study in the private department pay high capital to the academy which directly goes to the administration and
help
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helps
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the country's
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country's
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countries
country
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 grow.
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, the teachers who earn capital for public academy
also
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 pay a levy to direct the ministry which means the administration
take
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takes
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 twice the
taxes
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 from various sources which
are
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is
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 not good for families.
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, all staff members of the school earn cash from their
parents
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which
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who
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they
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apply
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pay
taxes
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 in another form which means
parents
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 are not required to pay any price to the ministry.
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, as per the government ,policy all citizens need to pay
taxes
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 to the administration because it is their choice whether their children study in government school or a private academy.
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, the authorities already opened many
schools
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 in my
cities
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city
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 and are free of education so no need to go to public
schools
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. To give an overview, public school offspring's
parents
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not
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do not
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 need to pay
taxes
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 to the authority because they already pay in advance.
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, as per authority rule all citizens need to pay
taxes
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