Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies ca make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples frm your own knowledge or experience.

Parents
who send their offspring to non-government
schools
should not pay income tax and the government should help their children's education system. I totally agree with
this
statement and my
further
justification will come in
further
paragraphs
along with
some relative examples. To commence with, families who pay high amounts of property in public
schools
should not pay any levy there are several reasons behind
this
.
Firstly
, they already contribute to their country's economy because they pay a high amount of pay in only education system which is beneficial for all sectors.
For instance
, those offspring who study in the private department pay high capital to the academy which directly goes to the administration and
help
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helps
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the country's
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country's
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countries
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grow.
Secondly
, the teachers who earn capital for public academy
also
pay a levy to direct the ministry which means the administration
take
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takes
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twice the
taxes
from various sources which
are
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is
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not good for families.
Lastly
, all staff members of the school earn cash from their
parents
which
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who
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also
they
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apply
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pay
taxes
in another form which means
parents
are not required to pay any price to the ministry.
On the other hand
, as per the government ,policy all citizens need to pay
taxes
to the administration because it is their choice whether their children study in government school or a private academy.
Additionally
, the authorities already opened many
schools
in my
cities
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city
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and are free of education so no need to go to public
schools
. To give an overview, public school offspring's
parents
not
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do not
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need to pay
taxes
to the authority because they already pay in advance.
However
, as per authority rule all citizens need to pay
taxes
.
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