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In the past, people ate local food in season, but nowadays, people can buy a variety of food from all over the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh it disadvantages?

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In old times, Citizens consumed municipal meals, but, Currently,
people
 are able to buy different types of food from everywhere. Most
people
's idea is that
,
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 There are more disadvantages than profits.
This
 essay will discuss and see their drawbacks and benefits. Well, Buying
variety
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a variety
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 of food from different
city
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 will give experience. It will create
to know
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knowledge
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 about how to be prepared.
In addition
, Broad citizens will consume
seafoods
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seafood
kinds of seafood
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.
It's
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Its
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 beneficial
sides
 are those,
For instance
 , Fish, Losos help
to
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with
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 some health problems, Those are
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the followings
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followings
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following
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,
Firstly
, It will
imrove
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improve
 our ability
of seeing
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.
Secondly
, For brainstorming, For circling
of
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blood
well
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on our
body
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bodies
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this natural products
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this natural product
these natural products
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 will grant us
usefulnesses
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usefulness
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And
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Other plus
sides
 were found. Writing about some drawbacks, Despite being utilizable
sides
,
People
 do not forget about that, Animals
also
 have their soul. Cooking them,
it
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is
damage
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damaging
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 to
the
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nature.
Together with
 these,
People
 need to keep the
enviroment
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environment
 and
his
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all
given
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the given
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 things. As an example, In foreign, Mainly, In China and
Tailand
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Thailand
, the horror condition is that
,
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 they consumed
alive
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the lives
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 of animals. In conclusion,
People
 have to take
natural
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more natural
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 meals than others. As much as possible, I consider that There are more
uncesssary
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unnecessary
necessary
sides
 than pluses
People
 need to eat
the
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apply
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local products
than
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rather than
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 all kinds of food.
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