The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates some facts about the underground railways in several large cities. These facts include the opening date, length of journey, and number of people using these systems. From an
overall
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perspective,
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the metro system of London is the oldest and longest, that of Los Angeles has been recently built: at the beginning of the 21st century.
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, the railway system of Los Angeles has a much shorter route than that of London. Observing the details, Kyoto's railway system has the shortest passage (only 11 kilometres) among all the other cities.
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, the capital of England has a track of 394 kilometres, which is about 40 times longer than the previous one. Focusing on the number of passengers, we can find that Kyoto's station has the fewest people, only 45 million passengers each year.
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, the metro of Tokyo occupied the first place in the aspect of the number of users, reaching 1927 million travellers annually. In conclusion, we could say that the shorter the road is, the fewer people decide to travel by metro.
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