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The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the types of devices that are used to watch television in Canada by people from 18 to 25
year-old
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 in the years 2009 and 2019.
Overall
 some devices presented an important increase
of
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flat-screen
TV
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TVs
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, mobile
phone
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phones
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 and
tablet
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tablets
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,
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 the conventional TV showed the highest reduction, over
the
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desktop
computer
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computers
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 and
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laptop
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laptops
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.
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 the percentage of desktop
computer
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computers
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 and
laptop
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laptops
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 decreased from 18% to 12% and 20% to 12%, they didn't decrease as much as the conventional TV which showed the most significant change
over
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 2009 to 2019, because it went from 34% to just only 4%. The percentage of mobile
phone
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phones
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 increased from 8% in 2009 to 2019,
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 the tablet followed a similar
growing
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with
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from
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 5% to 19%.
On the other hand
, despite its variances, the figures for both mobile
phone
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phones
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 and
laptop
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laptops
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 did not change a lot, with 15% and 20% in 2009 to 26% and 12% in 2019.
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