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Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education and that governments should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disargee ?

#people #right #access #university #education #governments #students #matter #background #disargee
Education not only
improve
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 your
knowlege
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knowledge
also
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but also
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can provide
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 you with new
oppertunities
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opportunities
, governments can
also
benefits
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 from their
students
 and that leads us to the
desicion
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decision
 that should government
pays
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 the fees of the universities to their
students
. Most
of
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startups
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 companies
runs
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 by undergraduate
students
 , these companies can impact the
economic
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 of the
country
, meaning that
government
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the government
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 should invest in
the
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young talents,
additionally
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university
students
 can get medals from national competitions ,
these
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and these
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 medals can be named by the
country
 of the
students
.
On the other hand
 not investing in
university
students
 can affect the
country
finiancally
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financially
due to
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 of these
students
, the fees of the
university
 can be covered in
short
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a short
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 time but the impact of the
students
to
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on
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 the
communites
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communities
community
 and the
country
 will
last
 longer. Free things may be used
wrong
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, that apply for
university
 when it comes with no charges,
students
 may take it as
fun
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 experiment and causing them to have bad marks or
droping
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dropping
 from the
university
,
therefore
 some rules should be followed
incase
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in case
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 of providing the
university
 seat for free. The rules should be restricted and
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apply
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which
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students
 take
this
 journey
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serious
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, one rule
for example
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is
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for each major there will be
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a minimum
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minimum
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a minimum
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 grade.
To sum up
,
government
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the government
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 can invest in their
students
 by providing their
university
 degree for free , and investing in
students
 can help the
economic
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 of the
country
 rise,
in
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On
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 the student side there
is
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 several agreements that must be followed
for getting
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to get
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 that academic degree with no fees.
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  • equal opportunity
  • financial background
  • equitable society
  • economic benefits
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • innovation
  • financial burden
  • student loans
  • long-term debt
  • nurturing talent
  • governmental budgets
  • funding
  • essential services
  • quality of education
  • overcrowding
  • scholarships
  • grants
  • low-income students
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