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Some people believe that all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent machines. What is your opinion?

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Artificial intelligence is believed to take over most of the
jobs
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 done by humans in the future.
While
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 most unskilled
jobs
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 will eventually be taken over by
robots
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, replacing humans in the
jobs
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 that require human contact is unlikely.
This
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 essay will discuss why eventually only a handful of
jobs
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 will be carried out by people.
To begin
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 with,
robots
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 may replace humans only in specific
jobs
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 where human skills are not required. Many companies are replacing people with artificially intelligent devices which are cost-effective as compared to hiring and training staff to carry out easy tasks.
Moreover
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, these
robots
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 perform these
jobs
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 with more precision and productively which will eradicate the challenge of human error and the time taken to complete a job. To cite an example, supermarkets have replaced cashiers and stock checkers with bots which cost way less than employees.
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, these bots can work around the clock and do not need any days off. For these reasons,
jobs
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 that do not require human involvement will be replaced by artificially intelligent
robots
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.
Conversely
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,
robots
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 will not be able to replace
jobs
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 that require a human touch. The human capacity to perform certain
jobs
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 is much more than
machines
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 and
robots
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 will never be able to achieve that capacity. Some examples of these specific tasks are massage, education, health and social work.
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,
machines
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 can not replace doctors as it is impossible for
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 to carry out an operation. These tasks can be carried out by specialists with high skills and can not be matched by bots.
To conclude
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,
while
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 some people agree that human employees will be replaced by
machines
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, others believe that they will not be able to replace certain skills. In my opinion, artificially intelligent
machines
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 might replace human workers to a large extent, but it is impossible to match the human capacity to perform high-skill
jobs
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.
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificially intelligent machines
  • Automate
  • Job displacement
  • Creative thinking
  • Human intuition
  • Ethical considerations
  • Human touch
  • Economic impact
  • Workforce
  • AI management
  • Collaboration
  • Data processing
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Adaptability
  • Unpredictability
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