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Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #governments #ban #sports #freedom #activity
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Dangerous
sports
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 as skydiving cause a lot of deaths and injuries every year.
Therefore
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,
people
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 believe that those
activities
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 should be restricted by
governments
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.
However
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, I believe that
people
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 should take
responsibility
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 for their own actions and have the freedom to make their own choices. On the one hand,
people
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 think that it is the
government
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's
responsibility
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 to protect their citizens from danger.
While
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 extreme
sports
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 usually cause more deaths and injuries than other
sports
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.
As a result
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, the
government
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 should restrict those
activities
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 in order to protect their
people
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.
Moreover
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, when accidents happen, the
government
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 or the public will be the ones who suffer from the
damage
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.
For example
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,
people
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 who get injured from doing those
activities
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 need medical treatment from the hospital which is funded by the
government
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.
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, as the
government
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 is the one who pays the
bills
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, it should be the one who takes
responsibility
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 and stops
people
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 from getting the
bills
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.
Although
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 extreme
sports
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 may create
damage
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. I still think that
people
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 should take
responsibility
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 for their own actions and have the freedom to make their own choices.
Firstly
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, every activity or sport has its own risks. It is hard to determine which should be banned or which should not.
Instead
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 of banning them,
governments
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 should provide guidelines on certain
activities
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.
For example
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, individuals must have insurance covered before attending
such
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 activity.
This
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 can limit the
damage
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 to a personal level. Which means that
people
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 will pay for their own
bills
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. In conclusion,
people
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 who think
governments
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 should take
responsibility
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 to avoid any
damage
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 from playing dangerous
sports
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 mainly
due to
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 public need to settle the bill. In my point of view, it is
people
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’s own choice and rather than banning those
activities
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,
governments
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 should provide guidelines and let individuals settle their own
bills
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • severe injuries
  • fatalities
  • base jumping
  • bull running
  • extreme skiing
  • safeguard
  • well-being
  • regulating
  • avoidable harm
  • healthcare costs
  • burdening
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • training
  • equipment
  • mitigated
  • personal satisfaction
  • mental health benefits
  • resilience
  • adventure
  • assess risks
  • public safety
  • unnecessary healthcare costs
  • outright bans
  • balanced approach
  • stringent safety standards
  • mandatory training sessions
  • adequately informed
  • safeguarding
  • public health
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