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The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of Internet users in three different countries and the world average between 1998 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The shown bar graph describes the rate of Internet users in Greece, Denmark, Canada, and the
world
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 average over a period of 15 years from 1998 to 2013. As is shown by the chart
most
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, most
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 of the data witnessed an upward trend, especially Denmark was the highest,
whereas
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 the opposite was true in the
world
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 average recorded the lowest. As the graph
show
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shows
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, the number of Denmark and Canada
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, respective
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respectively
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respective
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respective,
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 stood
in
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at
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 over 21 and 25
thousands
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thousand
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 in
1998
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1998,
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then
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 both of them
were
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apply
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saw an increase
gradually
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apply
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,
reached
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reaching
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the
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their
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top
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peak
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 in
term
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terms
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 of the number 95 and over 85 units. Regarding Greece and
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world
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the world
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average
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average,
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also
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 begin at a low
rate
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rate,
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get
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getting
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 only approximately 5 units
but
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, but
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then
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 both Greece and
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world
Correct article usage
the world
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 average jumped significantly, and projections of around 62 and 35 by the end of the period there were
a
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apply
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surpass
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surpassed
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of
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apply
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the number.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Internet penetration
  • Trend
  • Growth rate
  • Increase/decrease
  • Comparative analysis
  • Significant
  • Average
  • Fluctuation
  • Plateau
  • Surge
  • Spike
  • Decline
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