Some people believe that the use of mobile phones in public places should be banned, while others think it is acceptable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The increase in mobile device innovations has
changes
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people
’s living habits, it even
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people
’s
behavior
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in contemporary society. Some
people
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a belief that it should be limited in some situations, whilst
others
hold the reverse viewpoint. On the one hand, the main argument in its
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is that using mobile
phones
can cause distractions for
others
, especially in some quiet public spaces.
For instance
, there is a growing tendency
that
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people
with wireless
earphone
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often
having
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phone calls anytime and anywhere;
also
, when the sound insulation is good, it will be difficult for users to notice their excessive volume.
Furthermore
,
government
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occasionally realize the extent to the fact that
people
will play the game or watch the video loudly without hesitation in some public spaces.
As a result
, there are more and more warning
sign
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been added in open spaces.
On the other hand
,
others
argue that using mobile
phones
have become part of daily life, it can help
people
keep in touch with family and friend.
Also
, mobile devices nowadays come up varieties of
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,
such
as email, news, camera and so on.
For example
, it helps
people
to capture
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and listen to their
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music
while
traveling
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. Those activities can be done silently without
distract
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people
, and most of the
device
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can switched to silent mode easily.
Besides
the aforementioned, because of the popularity of mobile
phones
,
people
can get help quickly in an emergency. These indicate whether a cell phone affects
others
depends on the user,
instead
of
cellphone
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itself. In my opinion, the use of mobile
phones
in public places should not be
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.
Although
it can create some negative effects in some situations,
however
, these issues can be mitigated through public awareness campaigns and responsible usage practices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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