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The graph given below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph given below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given line graph depicts information about
number
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a number
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 of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 with four different transport systems. Units measured in millions.
Overall
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, the road was all time on peak until the
end
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, meanwhile, the pipeline was at its minimum position. It can be clearly seen that road started from nearly 70
million
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, had some fluctuations and in the
end
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 reached approximately 100
million
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 tonnes.
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, a pipeline from about 5
million
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 increased to 20
million
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,
however
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, had the smallest quantity of tone. It can be clearly observed that goods water and rail started from
approximately
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an approximately
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 similar
position
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 and until the
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end
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end,
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 they improved almost
similar
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, but in the
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end
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end,
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 the difference between them was around 20
tones
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tonnes
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. It is interesting to note that water and rail grew almost identically, and intersected only one time in 1978 year.
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, in the beginning, rail was a little bit leader,
however
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, with mild changes in the
end
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 the leadership point remained water.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words end, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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