The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given illustration represents the
cycle
of the huge fish
named salmon
and the cycle
of being an adult.
Overall
,this
cycle
requires only 3 steps, and fish
grow in three different locations such
as the upper river where they will grow and adapt then
to the lower river where the flow is the fact in the end fish
will go to the open sea.
It can be clearly seen that the first stage
is becoming fish
from the egg. Salmon
eggs grow in the upper river where the moving is so low, moreover
, they grow under reeds, and near small stones, and after approximately 5-6 months they will fry. Usually, the fry’s length starts from 3 and might be up to 8 cm.
In the next stage
, the fish
will move to the middle water. There fish
grow until about 4 years. Furthermore
, they will called smolt, and they can be from 12 to 15 centimetres.
The last
stage
of the cycle
is becoming big salmon
from smolt. In this
stage
, salmon
will change the location for a bigger, more accurate open sea. After 5 years until the end of life, they will grow there, furthermore
, big salmon
might be from 70 to 76 cm in length.Submitted by aikumarbekarys on
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