Is is generally believed that some people are born with certain talent, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that can be taught to become a good sports person or musicians. Discuss both sides and your own opinion.

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popular opinion among people about talented people, that they are gifted since the day they

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born,

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as an athlete or an artist.

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, some well-known musicians and

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were born without any talents. In my view, there

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both sides for some

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, professional footballer Lionel Messi was naturally born small, and

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helps him move around in confined spaces on the field. With

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he won every possible individual trophy in his career.

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may give individuals a head start, but it does not guarantee long-term success.

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football players

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, drugs, etc. But if they trained hard, they would be on the list of successful football players.

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, there are enough people who started with little

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but became

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remember first is Cristiano Ronaldo. When he

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can be one of the greatest footballers of all time. But through years he did it. When he was asked about the key

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his success, he answered - hard work. And yet he ages like a wine. In conclusion, it is good to have a certain

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from birth, but it does not guarantee success until hard work.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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260 words

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