Is is generally believed that some people are born with certain talent, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that can be taught to become a good sports person or musicians. Discuss both sides and your own opinion.

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popular opinion among people about talented people, that they are gifted since the day they
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born,
such
as an athlete or an artist.
However
, some well-known musicians and
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were born without any talents. In my view, there
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truth
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both sides for some
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. On the one hand, being born with talents promotes human
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others in specific
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For instance
, professional footballer Lionel Messi was naturally born small, and
this
helps him move around in confined spaces on the field. With
this
talent
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he won every possible individual trophy in his career.
On the other hand
,
talent
may give individuals a head start, but it does not guarantee long-term success.
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, there
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football players
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picked up early at
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age, and
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just disappeared because of laziness in
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,
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, drugs, etc. But if they trained hard, they would be on the list of successful football players.
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, there are enough people who started with little
talent
but became
successfull
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successful
through hard work and dedication. The person
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remember first is Cristiano Ronaldo. When he
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at
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age, nobody expected
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he
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can be one of the greatest footballers of all time. But through years he did it. When he was asked about the key
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his success, he answered - hard work. And yet he ages like a wine. In conclusion, it is good to have a certain
talent
from birth, but it does not guarantee success until hard work.
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  • innate
  • skilled
  • field
  • successful
  • hard work
  • dedication
  • long-term
  • nurturing
  • honing
  • training
  • mentorship
  • potential
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