The chart shows requests for information at a tourists office in the United Kingdom from January to June

The chart shows requests for information at a tourists office in the United Kingdom from January to June
The chart illustrates
requests
for
data
at a tourist
center
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centre
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in the UK between
January
to June.
Overall
, the applications for information in
person
and by telephone
shows
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show
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a dramatic rise in a
6 months
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6-month
period
.
While
applications for
data
by letter/email decreased slightly over the
period
of time. It can be clearly seen that
requests
in
person
started at 400 pieces
requests
in
January
and it has rocketed to 1900
requests
in June exceeding all other types of
requests
. At the same time applications by telephone began at 900 in
January
and witnessed a significant increase over 6 months finishing at 1600 in June. Regarding the
requests
by letter/
email
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it was higher than
requests
for
data
in
person
in
January
, at 790 and the number halved during the
period
ending at 395 In conclusion, two types of
requests
such
as in
person
and by telephone for the
data
have been going up for a given time
of
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apply
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period
.
While
,
request
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requests
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by letter/email slowly went down till May, after that it
has
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apply
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settled the level off in 2 months
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words requests, data, january, person, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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