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The quality of healthcare a person received should not depend on the size of their bank balance. The government is responsible for providing a high level of healthcare for all its citizens. To what extent do you agree?

#quality #healthcare #person #size #bank #balance #government #level #citizens
The provided table illustrates data regarding
milk’s
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production
 per
year
 in four countries in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
, the majority of
milk’s
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milk
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production
 per
year
 in 1990, 2000, and 2010 was in the
Netherlands
.
While
Guatemala
 has at least produced
milk
 per
year
 in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010, It is apparent that the
Netherlands
 produced the most
milk
 annually in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010, followed by Australia,
Tanzania
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and Tanzania
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, and the least produced
milk
 per
year
 in
Guatemala
. The
Netherlands
 produced the most
milk
 in 2000. Australia produced the most
milk
 in 1990,
then
 slightly decreased in 2000 and 2010.
Tanzanisa
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Tanzania
 produced at least
milk
 in 1990,
then
 slightly increased in 2000 and 2010.
Lastly
,
Guatemala
 produced at least some
milk
 annually between the four countries.
However
, the
production
 of
milk
 in
Guatemala
 dramatically rose in 2000 and 2010.
In addition
, the
production
 of
milk
 annually in
Guatemala
 significantly rose from 26,000
liters
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 in 1990 to 55,000
liters
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 in 2000 and still increased to 84,000
liters
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 in
year
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 2010.
While
 the
production
 of
milk
 annually in Australia slightly decreased from 11,246,000
liters
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 in 1990 to 9,165,000 in 2010,
Furthermore
, The
Netherlands
 was the country that produced the most
milk
 annually, at 11,262,000
liters
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 in 1990, and slightly rose to 11,155,000
liters
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 in 2000.
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Be sure to fully address the prompt and state your opinion on the extent to which you agree with the statement.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic human right
  • societal well-being
  • quality of life
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • social unrest
  • affordability
  • accessibility
  • social justice
  • equality
  • resource allocation
  • quality standards
  • private healthcare
  • profit
  • taxes
  • burden
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