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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart provides information about the highs and lows in the quantity and quality of junk food being eaten by Australian adolescents between the years 1975 and 2000.
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, we observe in 1975, the demand for Pizza and Hamburger was lowest as compared to Fish and chips.
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 in 1975.
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, hamburgers gained a very sudden popularity and in the
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 ,1985 it was consumed 80
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 in the same ,
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 the pizza is eaten 40
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, in 2000 both these items rose sharply approximately 90 – 100
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 per
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. In comparison, Fish and Chips are showing a totally opposite trend. We notice that people were eating it 100
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 in 1975. Later on in 1980 it modestly dropped to almost 80
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, it again became popular in 1985 and is consumed more than 90
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. But after some time, it again showed a dramatically downward trend, in 1990 it was nearly 60, in 1995 it was 50 and in 2000 it was almost 40
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Vocabulary: Replace the words times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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