Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economis development,but many important social values can be lost as a result . Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages ?
Many countries
prefers
to develop their own style of living Change the verb form
prefer
due to
Linking Words
finincial
stability .Correct your spelling
financial
however
,some are of Linking Words
opinion
that Correct article usage
the opinion
this
leads to Linking Words
a
detrimental effects Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
to
their social values .In my point of view , there are more advantages than disadvantages Change preposition
on
improving
Change preposition
to improving
life
standards a part of economically. Use synonyms
This
essay will Linking Words
further
elaborate on my views on the positive and negative aspects of the trends in the upcoming paragraphs .
To commence with , there are a couple of main advantages of Linking Words
finincial
stability .Correct your spelling
financial
Firstly
,Linking Words
large
sum of money could make an individual Add an article
a large
fulfill
Change the spelling
fulfil
their
every content in their lives including , household Correct pronoun usage
apply
maintainence
,college debts ,medical insurance and s on .Correct your spelling
maintenance
Thats
why if a Correct your spelling
That
crowds
have Fix the agreement mistake
crowd
a
stress of Correct article usage
the
day to day
husttles ,he Add a hyphen
day-to-day
donot
have to worry about that. Verb problem
does not
For instance
,people usually Linking Words
needs
to be economically strong to survive their Change the verb form
need
life
in a peaceful Use synonyms
however
Linking Words
finincial
stability makes them Correct your spelling
financial
to
afford Correct word choice
able to
every
entire needs .Change the word
their
As a result
,Linking Words
government
should be focused on the improvement of economic development for their countries which will help them Add an article
the government
living
a standard Change the form of the verb
live
life
.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
,when only focusing on economic development ,Linking Words
masses
can lose their own social values by not giving time Correct article usage
the masses
their
neighbours family and friends . Change preposition
to their
Besides
,every citizen would become busy Linking Words
on
their Change preposition
with
out door
work which will make them Correct your spelling
outdoor
a
Correct article usage
apply
distance
from their culture ,festivals and so on. Replace the word
distant
Therefore
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
trends
will Fix the agreement mistake
trend
leads
a country out of culture , as people would their inclination towards money rather than their family and culture .
In conclusion ,making their Change the verb form
lead
living
Correct word choice
apply
life
better in the future Use synonyms
according to
Linking Words
development
of Correct article usage
the development
economy
is an excellent way .In Add an article
the economy
an economy
particula
, Correct your spelling
particular
economically
strong has Add a missing verb
being economically
also
helped all to become Linking Words
a
Correct article usage
apply
fortune
Replace the word
fortunate
however
there a Linking Words
drwabacks
Correct your spelling
drawback
drawbacks
for
social norms and values.Change preposition
to
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