the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000

the graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car bus or train between 1970 and 2000
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The line chart illustrates the
number
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of
people
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travelling each day by
car
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,
bus
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as well
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as
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and
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train over a 60-year period between 1970 and 2030.
It is clear that
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the
car
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is the most popular means of transport for UK
commuters
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throughout the period shown.
In contrast
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,
while
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the proportions of
people
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commuting by train and
bus
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increase gradually, the
number
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of
commuters
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who use the
bus
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on a daily basis decreases steadily. In 1970, approximately 5
million
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UK
commuters
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travelled by
car
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on a daily basis,
while
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users who commuted by
bus
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and train
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were just
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around 4
million
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and 2
million
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respectively. In the year 2000, there was a considerable rise in the driving to work by
car
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, at 7
million
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people
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and the
number
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of commuting rail passengers witnessed a slight increase, with 3
million
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.
However
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, there was a small drop in travelling by
bus
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around 0.5
million
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people
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. By 2030, travelling by
car
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is expected to rise dramatically, about 9
million
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commuters
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.
Also
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, the
number
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of
people
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using trains is predicted to reach nearly 5
million
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in the same time period.
In contrast
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, buses are predicted to become a less popular transport than others, falling by just under 3
million
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users.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, car, bus, commuters, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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