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Some people believe that international tourism has brought enormous benefit to some places. Others argue that there is concern about its negative impact on local inhabitants and environment. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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 some people think of promoting
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 as a beneficial scheme to boost the economy of a
country
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, others are concerned about its negative impact on local people and the surrounding environment. I believe a
country
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 should promote
tourism
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 for two reasons.
However
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, there is one drawback that will be discussed. First of all, attracting foreign tourists to visit a
country
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 is a good sign because
this
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 can boost the
overall
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 economy of the
country
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.
For example
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, a recent survey on South Asia showed that approximately 10% of Bangladesh's GDP directly comes from the
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 industry and
this
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 can
further
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 be increased to 25% if they take sufficient measures to draw the attention of European and North American people.
In addition
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,
tourism
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 gives the opportunity to promote local industries by creating a high demand for regional products.
This
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 is a positive trend because the money the government will profit from
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tourism
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 sector can be spent on various welfare schemes
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 as building better infrastructure for the citizens, a better schooling system for teenagers etc.
Secondly
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,
tourism
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 helps to increase cultural diversity in a
country
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, since visitors come from different socioeconomic backgrounds,
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 they bring a lot of diverse perspectives with them.
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, Singapore is one of the most culturally diverse countries in Asia, since a large chunk of visitors were attracted to
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country
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they decided to stay there forever. Notwithstanding, there is
also
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 one significant disadvantage associated with
tourism
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: the destruction of ecology. When there is a large influx of tourists, they tend to harm the native species of a
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. Take the example of India, where almost 10% of native species of plants are now on the verge of extinction
due to
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 the ignorance of the tourists who visit these places.
Consequently
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, the native species play a crucial role in balancing the ecosystem of the
country
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 and
also
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 influence climate change. In conclusion, promoting
tourism
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 is a positive thing for the two reasons outlined above.
Nevertheless
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, it is not a perfect development unless we address the ecological issue
that is
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 associated with
tourism
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.

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