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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Although
 many individuals think that
people
 who have academic degrees and practical experiences like doctors and engineers are forced to
work
 in the
country
 where they learn these skills others have another sight and they believe that professionals could have their jobs everywhere they aspire. Both of these views will be
further
 discussed in the following paragraphs. In my opinion, every person must be free to make decisions about the place they want to
work
 regardless of which
country
did their
Verb problem
they are
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 training
.
Change preposition
in.
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 On the one hand, some
people
 say that a skilled person should be employed in the
country
 where they acquired these experiences. These
people
 believe
as
Correct word choice
that
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 their government invests a vast amount of money in their universities and
department
Fix the agreement mistake
departments
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 which nourish the professionals and
also
taught
Wrong verb form
teach
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 them how to
work
.
Accordingly
, expect the doctors and engineers who studied in their
country
 to live and
work
 in their
country
 and give service to them.
On the other hand
, many
people
 have the opinion that everyone should be free to choose the
country
 where they want to
work
.
This
 group of
people
 believes
As
Correct word choice
That
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 every human is free to make decisions about their fate and has the right to choose which
country
 is appropriate for living in,
in addition
, there are some
people
 who want to follow their ambition.
Therefore
,
should
Correct pronoun usage
there should
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 not be any force on someone to
work
 in the place where they studied. In summary,
people
 are only two groups; some believe every
people
 should be free to choose the
country
 want to
work
 in, and others think doctors and engineers must
work
 in the
country
 here
learned
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to learn
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 how to
work
. I personally believe that the first view is better because God created all
people
 free so they should be free and without any force
make
Fix the infinitive
to make
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 decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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