In the interest of road safety, cyclists should be required to pass a test before they are allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The number of cyclists is increasing across the world,
however
without having the pre-established regulations to control their movement on
roads
. Some
people
believe that
people
ought to pass a
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test to be able to cycle on the
roads
that are mainly used by
public
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. It is my firm belief that in the absence of these
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tests, more
road
accidents
will likely
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take place. First of all, I think it is a pragmatic method to make it imperative for cyclists to undergo proper licensing.
This
regulation will create an awareness for the ignorant
people
who drive recklessly even on the
roads
that are predominantly utilized by
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.
For example
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exerting a law forcing bikers to obtain a
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license will cause a
noticable
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decrease in the number of bikes that
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to terrorize the
roads
.
Furthermore
, after the introduction of a similar law in our country, the main
roads
once
were
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chaotic became more systematic and organized for everyone to drive. Another reason why I agree with
this
notion is
due to
concerns related to the health of drivers themselves. Nearly half of all
road
accidents
involve either a collision with a
cyclist
or
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a
cyclist
as the victim.
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,
although
it may cause
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deception among
the
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people
's view on the severity of
road
accidents
involving a bike,
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some of these
accidents
might even
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in
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of a
cyclist
. In conclusion,
while
some form of
cyclist
education and awareness is deemed to be important for
road
safety,
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mandatory testing, a combination of
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and educational approaches will strike a better balance between safety and accessibility for cyclists.
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