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The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future.

The diagrams below show the present building of a college and the plan for changes to the college site in the future.
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The map above illustrates
comparison
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a comparison
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 between the current placement of a college and the construction plan
to
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for
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 the college site in 2020 It clearly can be seen that
from
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apply
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the plan map shows several changes compared to the current building.
Moreover
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,
couple
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a couple
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 of classrooms will be added and
parking
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the parking
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area
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 will be widened in future. In the future, the entrance will be moved to the south
area
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 whilst
currently
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 it's on
north
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the north
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 side of
building
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the building
a building
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.
On the contrary
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, the present toilet is in
bottom
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the bottom
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 corner directly facing the entrance and soon will be placed
to
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in
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 the top corner
replaced
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 the current entrance.
In addition
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, there will be two new classrooms and will be located in the present reception and the library location, so the reception will be smaller and moved to the centre of the main building and the library will be on
left
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the left
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 side exactly after the door. Currently,
parking
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the parking
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area
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 at
college
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the college
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 can contain only four cars at maximum, so the university plans to destroy the footpath and the garden in order to
constructs
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larger
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a larger
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 parking
area
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,
therefore
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 six cars can fit into the car park.
Building
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The building
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 will have a new shop in
left
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the left
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 corner that previously was
lunch
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the lunch
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area
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, so the lunch
area
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 will be smaller and can be found by walking through
entry
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the entry
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 door. The lunch
area
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 will be placed
in
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on
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left
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the left
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 side exactly before the shop.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Structure
  • Design
  • Facilities
  • Expansion
  • Renovation
  • Development
  • Aesthetics
  • Functionality
  • Enhancement
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
  • Adaptability
  • Capacity
  • Optimization
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