Write a 250-word essay for the topic: Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some

poeple

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people

argue that

kids

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should not be used for advertisement

however

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it affects them in several negative ways.

this

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essay is going to discuss

about

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apply

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this

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issue. In modern

time

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times

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advertisements

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play

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important role, which you can see

them

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apply

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in your daily life in many forms - on TV,

youtube

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YouTube

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, social platforms, apps, radios, billboards, magazines, shopping malls and more. some companies

aimed

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aim for

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kids

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for their commercial purposes

however

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poeple

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people

argue that it

affect

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affects

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them from

negative

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a negative

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sides

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side

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for example

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, some sugary breakfast cereals which are not healthy use

favorite

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favourite

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cartoon characters in their

advertisements

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. when children watch, it

influence

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influences

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them and they think it is a good thing that we can buy.

moreover

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, when

parents

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say no it makes anger on them.

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show examples

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a result

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result

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result,

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they feel

disappoint

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disappointed

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with their

parents

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however

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commercials

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neevr

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never

think about

result

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the result

a result

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which

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that

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they can make. even they know most of

time

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the time

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some

parents

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can not say "no" to

kids

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and they

oblige

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are obliged

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to buy

such

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things.

on the other hand

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parents

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should explain to

kids

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that we can not buy anything we see in

advertisements

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. they try to make you buy something. they always try to influence the way you think. even in

canada

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Canada

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, every year 1.1$ billion is spent

for

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such

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advertisements

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. some

parents

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argue

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this

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about this

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issue but it has not

concluded

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been concluded

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yet. most

parents

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can avoid

such

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problems

with limit

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by limiting

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watching

youtube

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YouTube

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commercials

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. at least children 3-6 should not watch anything without

approval

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the approval

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of their

parents

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. in

conclucion

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conclusion

commercials

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are

undeniable

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an undeniable

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part of our

life

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lives

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hope in the future companies will decrease

such

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commercials

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and make

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them

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carefully

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careful

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for

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about

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kid's

benefits

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benefit

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
38
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Write a 250-word essay for the topic: Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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