Write a 250-word essay for the topic: Some people think that advertisements aimed at children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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some

poeple

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people

argue that

kids

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should not be used for advertisement

however

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it affects them in several negative ways.

this

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essay is going to discuss

about

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apply

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this

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issue. In modern

time

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times

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advertisements

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play

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important role, which you can see

them

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apply

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in your daily life in many forms - on TV,

youtube

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YouTube

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, social platforms, apps, radios, billboards, magazines, shopping malls and more. some companies

aimed

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aim for

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kids

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for their commercial purposes

however

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poeple

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people

argue that it

affect

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affects

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them from

negative

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a negative

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sides

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side

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for example

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, some sugary breakfast cereals which are not healthy use

favorite

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favourite

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cartoon characters in their

advertisements

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. when children watch, it

influence

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influences

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them and they think it is a good thing that we can buy.

moreover

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, when

parents

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say no it makes anger on them.

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show examples

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a result

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result

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result,

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they feel

disappoint

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disappointed

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with their

parents

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however

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commercials

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neevr

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never

think about

result

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the result

a result

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which

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that

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they can make. even they know most of

time

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the time

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some

parents

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can not say "no" to

kids

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and they

oblige

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are obliged

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to buy

such

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things.

on the other hand

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parents

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should explain to

kids

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that we can not buy anything we see in

advertisements

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. they try to make you buy something. they always try to influence the way you think. even in

canada

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Canada

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, every year 1.1$ billion is spent

for

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such

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advertisements

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. some

parents

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argue

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this

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about this

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issue but it has not

concluded

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been concluded

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yet. most

parents

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can avoid

such

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problems

with limit

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by limiting

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watching

youtube

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YouTube

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commercials

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. at least children 3-6 should not watch anything without

approval

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the approval

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of their

parents

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. in

conclucion

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conclusion

commercials

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are

undeniable

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an undeniable

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part of our

life

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lives

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hope in the future companies will decrease

such

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commercials

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and make

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them

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carefully

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careful

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for

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about

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kid's

benefits

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benefit

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

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for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
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take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

274 words

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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