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Some people think that purpose of museums should be to attract and entertain young people. Others believe that the purpose of a museum is to educate, not entertain. Disuss both view and give opinion

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Few
persons
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people
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 believe that
musems
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museums
 are
build
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built
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 to attract and to
entertaine
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entertain
the
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apply
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youngsters.
Whereas
, few
thinks
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think
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 that it was built to educate the young ones rather not entertain them and
i
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I
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 agree with that second opinion. At present ,
childrens
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children
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 are not so interested in visiting museums and
therefore
 we need to make it more
fascinting
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fascinating
.
This
 is because of the
,
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 lessons that could be taught by our
history
 and
also
 to remember the errors which we have
did
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made
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 in our past.
Therefore
,we the society ,teachers and education should impose our
history
 on students in a more interesting way.
For example
,we can make a movie about our independence and telecast
them
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it
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 for our students.By doing so,we can show the hurdles and injuries faced by our ancestors.
As a result
,the students will get
a
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an
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 urge to see the evidence and remains of their
indepenence
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independence
 in
museum
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the museum
a museum
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.
Consequently
,they will be attracted and fascinated by our museums.
However
, rather than educating them we cannot make the
museum
 into an entertainment centre.
Eventhough
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Even
,
it
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though it
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 could captivate the young people, it could
also
 destroy the whole concept of teaching
history
.
For instance
, museums
were
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are
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 like a treasure, to those who seek knowledge
in
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of
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history
.
Moreover
, making it into an entertainment centre can nullify the dignity and pride of our
history
.
Due to
 that,we should make it more appealing and engaging rather than entertaining. In my opinion ,teaching is the main objective of
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museum
.
To conclude
,we should not convert the
museum
 into an exhibition to buy things.I believe
,
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the main
purpouse
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purpose
 of
museum
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the museum
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 is to teach.
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