The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.

The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
The provided bar charts indicate data regarding the number of individuals affected by various types of
noise
pollution
day
and
night
in
cities
and rural
areas
in 2007.
Overall
, the majority of individuals affected by both
cities
and rural
areas
of
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noise
pollution
day
and
night
was
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traffic
in 2007. The lowest of individuals affected by both
cities
and rural
areas
of
noise
pollution
day
and
night
was industry in 2007. It is apparent that, in the
cities
area, the highest number was occupied by
traffic
with just over 60 at
day
and just under 50 at
night
in 2007, followed by train, aircraft and industry.
Similary
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Similarly
, in the rural
areas
, the highest number was occupied by
traffic
just under 35
at
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day
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the day
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and just under 25 at
night
in 2007, followed by
train
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trains
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, aircraft and nobody affected
noise
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by noise
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pollution
by industry in rural
areas
.
To conclude
, both
cities
and rural
areas
affected
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the most
noise
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by noise
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pollution
in
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day
and
night
by
traffic
.
However
,
in
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cities
area
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are
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affected
noise
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by noise
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pollution
more than
rural
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in rural
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areas
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, pollution, day, night, cities, areas, traffic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • number of people
  • affected by
  • types of noise pollution
  • cities
  • rural areas
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • daytime
  • nighttime
  • summarize
  • main findings
  • conclusion
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