The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
The provided bar charts indicate data regarding the number of individuals affected by various types of
noise
pollution
day
and night
in cities
and rural areas
in 2007.
Overall
, the majority of individuals affected by both cities
and rural areas
of
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noise
pollution
day
and night
was
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traffic
in 2007. The lowest of individuals affected by both cities
and rural areas
of noise
pollution
day
and night
was industry in 2007.
It is apparent that, in the cities
area, the highest number was occupied by traffic
with just over 60 at day
and just under 50 at night
in 2007, followed by train, aircraft and industry. Similary
, in the rural Correct your spelling
Similarly
areas
, the highest number was occupied by traffic
just under 35 at
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during
day
and just under 25 at Correct article usage
the day
night
in 2007, followed by train
, aircraft and nobody affected Fix the agreement mistake
trains
noise
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by noise
pollution
by industry in rural areas
.
To conclude
, both cities
and rural areas
affected
the most Add a missing verb
are affected
noise
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by noise
pollution
in
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day
and night
by traffic
. However
, in
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cities
area
affected Correct your spelling
are
noise
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by noise
pollution
more than rural
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in rural
areas
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