The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the Happy Valley Shopping Center in 1982 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate how Happy Valley Shopping
centre
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Centre
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developed over two different
time
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times
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between 1982 to 2012
Overall
,
it is clear that
there
was
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were
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a number of changes ,
the
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apply
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most notably the lake was demolished and
replaceced
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replaced
by furniture retail .
Addictionally
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Additionally
, the parking lot was added in the left corner of the map In the first picture , there was a lake which was surrounded by many trees and next to the entrance . Entering the entrance , the lobby
area
was between the
cofffee
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coffee
shop and
toilets
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the toilets
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. In front of the lobby
area
, there was an entertainment
area
which was in the centre of the shopping centre . There was a shop food
store
at
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on
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the North of the map .
While
to the south there were 4 elevators to
2nd
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the 2nd
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floor , the
sport
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sports
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store
, electronic
store
, furniture
store
can be seen in the East In 2012 , the parking lot was destroyed
inn
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in
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the left corner of the map . The furniture retail was constructed to replace the lake . Entering the entrance , the lobby
area
and coffee shop had been knocked down
while
the entertainment
area
and toilet still existed . The food
store
in the north had been replaced by the sports
store
and electronics
store
. The
store
area
in the West was divided into four sides , on the south side , there was the food
store
and theme restaurant .
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