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The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information about the average number of servings of ice cream sold each day in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The table compared the average
sales
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 of
ice
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cream
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 in 2015 and 2016 from April to
September
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 in Springer’s Cafe.
Overall
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, from both years, the highest
sales
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 were in July 2016, and the lowest was in April 2015. In 2015, the same
number
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 of
ice
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cream
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 was sold in May and
September
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.
Furthermore
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, the
ice
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cream
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sales
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 increased from April to August 2015 and plunged in
September
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. Meanwhile, from April to July 2016, it rose and started to decrease in August and
September
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. The data in 2015 showed an increased trend in the serving of
ice
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cream
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 from April to August. It began with 15 servings per day, which was the least
number
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 of
sales
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 in two different years and grew to 60 servings, the top deals – most successful in 2015. Unfortunately, it plummeted to merely 25
ice
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cream
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 served in
September
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, the same
number
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 as in May. The
ice
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cream
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sales
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 rose from April to July 2016. It was 25
ice
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 creams on average per day in April to 80 in July, the best deals in both years.
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, in August, it decreased by five
ice
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cream
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 to 75 and continued to fall to 30 servings of
ice
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cream
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 in
September
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.
Moreover
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, the small
number
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 of
ice
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cream
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sales
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 in 2016 was 25, and it happened in April.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, ice, cream, september, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number of servings
  • compared to
  • trend
  • increase/decrease in sales
  • consistent pattern
  • seasonal variations
  • notable discrepancies
  • significant differences or similarities
  • external factors
  • consumer preferences
  • economic factors
  • notably higher or lower sales
  • promotions
  • spikes or declines
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