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In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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These days, the longevity of residents is increasing in several countries and leads to overpopulation.
However
, some
people
 tend to believe that having an elderly population has more benefits than negative effects.
This
 essay will shed light on both views before giving my own opinion. On the one hand, an ageing population can put a strain on government coffers
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 to old age allowance.
In other words
, there are several elderly
people
 who do not have
ability
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 to earn for their daily needs, so the government would pay a huge amount of money for the old. Another drawback is the lack of
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 forces in numerous industries that need creativity
such
 as
adverstisement
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advertisement
advertisements
 and gaming. When it comes to old
people
, their mindsets are normally hard to change.
Therefore
, they do not have
novels
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 ideals as
young
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 generation.
On the other hand
,
old
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 generation can improve
national
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 GDP as they are one of the main
contribute
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 to the income of
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, health care. Regarding old
people
, they might go to
hospital
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 to treat sickness
regularly
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 than young
one
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.
As a result
, medical
service
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 can obtain more money to promote economic growth. Another advantage is that an ageing population can contribute to society with their knowledge.
That is
 to say, they can give advice to young
people
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to
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teach junior experiences to help them lead a decent life. In conclusion, all things mentioned, I tend to think that it has both merits and demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ageing population
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • contribution
  • economy
  • society
  • healthcare
  • youth employment
  • community
  • intergenerational support
  • volunteerism
  • mentorship
  • increased demand
  • pension costs
  • social welfare systems
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • intergenerational conflict
  • technological adaptability
  • dependency
  • effective
  • skill development
  • employment opportunities
  • intergenerational solidarity
  • communication
  • lifelong learning
  • technological literacy
  • age-friendly
  • social policies
  • infrastructure
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