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Band 3.5

Some people believe that the media is responsible for violence in society. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #media #violence #society
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 behind the code The
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it continues swapping. After the inner label, E and D decrease simultaneously so that
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitize
  • aggression
  • sensationalize
  • viewership
  • vulnerable groups
  • predispositions
  • personal responsibility
  • mitigating
  • high-profile crimes
  • correlation
  • constructive role
  • awareness campaigns
  • non-violent conflict resolution
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