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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of
visitors
in
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 a specific Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017. It is measured in Millions.
Overall
, it can be seen that the total
number
 of
visitors
 increased significantly over the period. Despite the fact that
visitors
 staying on cruise ships began with a low value, it overtook the
visitors
 that stayed on
island
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the island
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 towards the end of the
year
.
To begin
 with, the total
number
 of guests stood at 1
million
 in 2010 and it grew steadily between 2011 and 2015 at about 2.75
million
.
Then
, the figures experienced
a
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constant growth
to
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 2016. After that, it witnessed a marked rise in the remaining years and ended with 3.5
million
.
Subsequently
,
visitors
 that lodged on cruise ships saw some fluctuations at the beginning of the
year
 which later rose gradually to 1
million
 in 2014.
However
, there was a slight increase in the
number
 of tourists
at the end
 of the
year
.
Next,
the
guests
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 staying on
Island
 was around 0.75
million
 in 2010 and it grew slowly over the years.
In contrast
, the
number
 of people that resided on
Island
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the Island
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 saw a minimal decline
at the end
 of
year
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the year
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 with
the
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 value of 1.5
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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