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Your friend invited you to his/her birthday party, but you are unable to attend. Write a letter apologizing for your absence. In your letter: State why you cannot go Explain your reason for not contacting your friend sooner Suggest another time to meet Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses

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Dear Smith, First of all, I 'm really sorry for the belated
birthday
 wishes, I was not able to attend your
birthday
 party
due to
 an emergency with my
wife
. On that day, I reached the office at 9.15 am, suddenly a neighbour called she said that your
wife
's health condition was not good so you couldn't come to the house, I 'immediately went to my house and
also
 went to the
near
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nearest
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 the hospital so
that is
 the main reason not attended to your party. Actually, I was in a hurry at that time so I needed to reach my home and forgotten about your
birthday
. My
wife
's health
conditions
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condition
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 was not good at that time so I was not able to attend the
birthday
 party.
Moreover
, at the same time, I called my father for urgent money required to deposit in the hospital. After that, my
wife
 left from hospital she was recovering day by day. I would like to meet you on Sunday at 9.00 pm at your house. Dear Ramesh Yours Sincerely,
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use transitions and connectors more clearly to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your letter with clearer paragraphing, separating the introduction, body, and conclusion for better readability.
Task Achievement
Early in the letter, directly address the purpose of your writing to ensure immediate clarity for the reader about your intention to apologize for your absence.
Task Achievement
Consider using a more consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter to maintain the formality and expressiveness suitable for an apology letter to a friend.
Task Response
You successfully provided a detailed explanation for your absence and offered a sincere apology.
Task Response
You have suggested another time to meet, which effectively addresses all parts of the task.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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