In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays unhealthy
lifestyle
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and obesity have contributed to a significant growth in
children
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the children
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population. Some people assert, that the government must be involved in getting rid of
this
problem. From my personal standpoint, I maintain
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view on
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concept, perceiving that there are other factors which are responsible for
spread
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the spread
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of diseases among
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the young
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generation as unhealthy
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lifestyles
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and lack of physical activities.
To begin
with, today the government has been providing numerous numbers of
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facilities, programs,
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and centers
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centers
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to engage in physical activities and adhere
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to sport
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sport
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regiments
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.
However
sedentary lifestyle of parents commonly observed in work environments and homes is one of the compelling
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why children are gaining weight significantly.
For example
, if the family member does not want to
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in exercises in quality time, it is undeniable, that children
also
will not perceive
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the importance
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of
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle.
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,
this
mindset leads to
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the development of dangerous
weight gaining
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weight-gaining
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factors and unhealthy habits.
In addition
, the emergence of various types of food products at marketplaces has altered young people’s attitudes towards living healthily. It is imperative to take into
child’s
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children’s
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mindset the quality of the food that they consume on a regular basis.
This
phenomenon can be elucidated by
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the observation
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that parents who engage kids in balanced
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or
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adequate diets consisting of vitamins, nutrients,
minerals
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and minerals
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are more likely to stay fit with optimal functioning of
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the metabolic
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system,
whereas
high-colorie
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high-calorie
food leads to the development of numerous ailments and ultimately result in weight increase.
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, when the child
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to have lunch with fried chips rather than vegetable salad, the organism will be impaired by
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amount of fats which will impact
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his health condition profoundly. In conclusion, there exist several strong rationales which play an essential role
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in addressing
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the issue of obesity and other diseases among youngsters. Even though it is
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, that the government should apply different methods
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as
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of
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engaging in physical fitness, in my point of view every kid
either
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and
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their family are responsible
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take
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fundamental
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a fundamental
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shift in
life
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behavior
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behaviour
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to prevent from overweight and illnesses.
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