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Some people think that there is a great influence of news media on people’s lives and this is a negative development. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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There are some
people
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 who believe that
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 channels have a huge effect on
people
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’s lives which may cause some negative problems. From my perspective,
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 partly agree with the statement because it has both a negative and positive side. On one hand, with a huge influence, the
media
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 may have a chance to control the community which is a negative problem
due to
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 fake
news
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.
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, the USA’s
media
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 always writes about North Korea in a negative way, making many
people
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 think it is a dangerous and risky country.
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,
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 companies
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 have to compete with each other to attract more viewers.
This
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 will inform clickbaits that the titles are very interesting but the main content is totally boring. Nowadays,
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click baiting
 is very common, you can see it everywhere on the internet, which is really causing a negative development
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 the
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 industry.
On the other hand
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, the
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also
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 has some positive points.
Firstly
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, the
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 can give a chance for
people
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 to access the hottest
news
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 around the world which can help them to catch up with the flow of time.
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, with
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 strong development of social
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such
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 as Facebook, Tik Tok
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 Instagram,
people
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 can get any information quicker and easier whenever they want.
Secondly
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, the
media
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also
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 helps
people
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 to raise their awareness. If they read or watch
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news
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the news
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 about crimes, they can think of a better solution to protect their house and family. In conclusion, the
media
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 have both positive and negative effects on our
life
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lives
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.
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, we need to choose the right source of
news
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 to protect ourselves from those negative problems.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence societal norms
  • sensationalism
  • misinformation
  • undue stress
  • media bias
  • skew public perception
  • polarized society
  • pessimistic worldview
  • relentless focus
  • raise awareness
  • foster important social changes
  • public opinion
  • exaggerated reports
  • health scares
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