18.Some people think that in modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other. But others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, technological
develpment
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development
developments
made drastic variations in our society. And, it is argued that recent social
circumstanaces
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circumstances
make individuals more reliable to others or not.
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both sights of it and, I totally agree with the idea that individuals are independent of each other these days. To commence with, many
people
insist that human beings are dependent. The rate of contact with others is increased if we compare it to the past. Because of the progress of
techonology
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technology
, we don't have a limitation of time and distance
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contacting someone anymore.
For example
, you can watch
people
who come from different countries communicate easily by using talking apps.
In addition
, you can talk with your friends or family in cyberspace even if you're not with them in reality and
people
upload their recent life by using social apps.
However
, I literally consider that the public is independent now. In the past,
people
have worked and studied together in the same place.
On the other hand
, overcoming the situation of the corona,
people
were get used to
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online even if communication is constituted with expression of face.
For example
, teachers use Zoom or other online teaching programs to give lectures to their students.
Moreover
, workers give feedback by using messenger and it results in a lack of communication about their privacy. In conclusion, because
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the number of contacts
are
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increasing, it can be said that
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generation is dependent
to
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others.
However
, because
people
are focused on contacting
with
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cyberspace using electronics
such
as mobile phones, it can be said that they don't have enough chance to
participating
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in real communication in the same place.
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