The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
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report
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from
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a bar chart which illustrates how many
hours
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on social media
in
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during
day
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the day
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from 2010 until 2016. A glance look at the graph reveals
,
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the biggest
percent
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go
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to
the
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Facebook
and next
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the other
applications
,
then
it is the
last
two
applications
which
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LinkedIn and Twitter, not only is
this
point clear but
also
as we can see, the
Facebook
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half for all of them. Notably,
Facebook
the highest with
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approximately
69
percent
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per cent
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which different from the
others app
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other apps
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with 51 per cent, the lowest
applications
is the LinkedIn and
twitter
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with only two
hours
in the
day
.
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,
from
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the resources displayed the other
applications
as unknown but we can see the
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difference
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between them and the rest of
applications
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the applications
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, they
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used
by five
hours
with approximately 18
percent
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per cent
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per
day
. Observe how
Facebook
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used
for 20
hours
in one
day
, which is obvious the
face book
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facebook
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got the highest
percent
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per cent
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.
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