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The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
#show #hours #media #summarise #information
This
 report
drives
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from
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 a bar chart which illustrates how many
hours
setting
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were spent
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 on social media
in
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apply
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during
day
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the day
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 from 2010 until 2016. A glance look at the graph reveals
,
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apply
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 the biggest
percent
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per cent
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go
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goes
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 to
the
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apply
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Facebook
 and next
is
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are
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 the other
applications
,
then
 it is the
last
 two
applications
 which
is
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are
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 LinkedIn and Twitter, not only is
this
 point clear but
also
 as we can see, the
Facebook
 had more
then
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than
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 half for all of them. Notably,
Facebook
 the highest with
approximatley
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approximately
 69
percent
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per cent
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 which different from the
others app
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other apps
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 with 51 per cent, the lowest
applications
 is the LinkedIn and
twitter
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Twitter
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 with only two
hours
 in the
day
.
Additionally
,
from
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the resources displayed the other
applications
 as unknown but we can see the
different
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difference
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 between them and the rest of
applications
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the applications
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, they
uesd
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used
 by five
hours
 with approximately 18
percent
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per cent
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 per
day
. Observe how
Facebook
uesd
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used
 for 20
hours
 in one
day
, which is obvious the
face book
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facebook
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 got the highest
percent
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per cent
show examples
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, day, percent, facebook, applications with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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