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The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.

The charts illustrate the number of people affected by four types of noise pollution day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007. Summarize and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph shows
due to
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noise
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pollution
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such
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 as traffic, trains, aircraft and industrial
areas
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 a large number of
people
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 were affected in the metro
cities
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as well as
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 in rural
areas
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 in the year 2007. We can observe that more
people
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 in the
cities
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 were affected by
noise
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pollution
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 than those residing in the countryside in 2007. The main source of
noise
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pollution
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 was Traffic. Specifically, the
noise
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 from traffic in the towns impacted 64
million
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 and 48
million
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people
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 day and night.
On the other hand
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, in the village, 34
million
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 and 24
million
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people
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 were affected, which was half of that in the
cities
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. During the day, the
noise
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 from the trains affected 10
million
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 suburban residents and 8
million
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people
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 in the countryside, which was moderately higher than the number of affected
people
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 at night in both
areas
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, with 8
million
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 and 6
million
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 respectively. The remaining
noise
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pollution
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 sources, aircraft and industries, affected the urban and rural residents less significantly. In the daytime,
noise
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 from aircraft affected 4
million
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 urban
people
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, twice the figure for rural residents. At night, the value was the same in the
cities
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as well as
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 in the rural
areas
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. Meanwhile, no one was affected by the industrial
noise
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 in the countryside.
However
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, 1
million
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 and 0.25
million
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 citizens in the urban area were impacted by the industrial
noise
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 during the daytime and nighttime.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noise, pollution, areas, people, cities, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • number of people
  • affected by
  • types of noise pollution
  • cities
  • rural areas
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • daytime
  • nighttime
  • summarize
  • main findings
  • conclusion
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