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some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research

#countries #people #bout #history #house #research
In recent years, almost all
people
 have a
home
 and some of
this
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is
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are
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 interested
about
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in
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 the history of the house because in some cases they can be old and important. in
this
 essay, I will explain the reasons
of
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for
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this
 choice and how can
people
 research
this
.
On the other hand
, It’s really interesting to know the history
about
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of
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 your
home
 for many reasons,
first,
if the immobile is of an important person
such
 as politics or another social class, the value of
home
 can increase when you want to sell it.
For instance
, my great friend has an incredible building and he had discovered
to read
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reading
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 books that some
Romans
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Roman
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 engineers had designed a beautiful picture in your bedroom. In my opinion, the reasons to research
the
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information about your
home
depends
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depend
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 on your curiosity but for many
people
 may be obsessive.
However
, to achieve the purpose, it’s necessary
read
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 a lot of information
above all
 on history because you must discover ancient societies and you can attribute the values of
home
.
Furthermore
, some rich
people
 live in old houses because they love the arts and any pictures that were drawn by famous artists.
However
,
It’s
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it's
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 easy to know how was draw the picture because there is a written
To Sum up
, there are a lot of causes why
people
 do research, to get possible emotions or precious things. Investigations can be easily done by using past residents or historical information and
community
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the community
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 can use metal detectors as well.
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