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transport delays are more common among people, what is problem and how could be situations be improved

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At present,
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transport
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system
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 is an essential part of urban life, after that lengthy journeys are frustrating and expensive for utilization. There turn out to be two main causes of
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 and several possible solutions, which I will discuss now. Arguably, there could be reasons why
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transport
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system
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 has been bad.
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main
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 cause is the lack of investment for road purposes or funding of infrastructure because the proportion of private vehicles
are
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 increasing.
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way
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 many drivers utilize their own car on the road without caution
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as
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a
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 result appearing traffic jam.
Second
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 negative aspect is
offender
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 by which I mean that we encounter numerous crimes
of
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road
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due to
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alcoholic
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 or answering
phone
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 in order to rise time of waiting.
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, in
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France, most people do not submit to low and policemen
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this
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 kind of circumstance is more common
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as
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 individuals suffer from it. Regarding potential
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solutions
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solution
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solutions
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, perhaps the best remedy would be to ameliorate
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panache
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 of drivers
for example
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, through
subsides
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subsidies
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 or
public private
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transport
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partnerships
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partnership
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 as was tried successfully in Germany during the Covid-19.
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, the government ought to enrich investment in better infrastructure
such
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 as eclectic law for submitted drivers. Alternatively, another solution
probably
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 to fabricate tax incentives to allow more home working, so that there is less need to commute from the suburbs to the inner city for work. As evidence, most developed countries create work territory
in
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near
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the home
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home
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homes
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 of inhabitants. In a nutshell. I firmly believe that one of the
most key
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keys
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 is investment
to
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in to
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transport
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system
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,
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together with
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government
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 and people can contrive to dwindle the burden on the
system
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