The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
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The line graphs illustrate the changes in the average monthly expenditure on
children
's physical activities by British parents and the quantities of children
joining in football, athletics, and swimming in the UK from 2008 to 2014.
Overall
, the statistics for parents' spending on children
's sports increased over the period shown. In terms of the number
of children
taking part in three sports, it rose between 2008 and 2014. It is clear from the graph that the total number
of children
who participated in football was considerably higher compared with other activities.
The figure for spending on sports grew steadily from 20 pounds in 2008 to more than 30 pounds in 2014.
Looking at participation numbers, the population of youth joining football stood at 8 million
in 2008, then
rose gradually to over 9 million
in 2014. Next,
the number
of children
who participated in athletics stayed unchanged between 2008 and 2010, at 1.5 million
. Subsequently
, it witnessed significant growth between 2010 and 2014, from around 1.5 million
to over 5 million
. Finally
, in aquatic activity, the number
of young people who took part increased moderately, from about 2 million
to more than 3.5 million
over the period given.Submitted by quynhtranhbh on
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