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Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination. While others believe that other factores like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Success is something that unfortunately not everyone can achieve in their lives.
For
this
 reason, there has been a debate about whether
this
 happens only to
people
 who have access to many opportunities
due to
money
 or the ones who work hard for it. Even though both ideas are true in some way, I will explain why having the resources like
money
 makes it easier to be successful. First of all, many
people
 tend to believe that not giving up and working hard for your dreams would guarantee the best life for you but
that is
 simply not true. Without a doubt, there have been many
people
 who built their
life
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 out of nothing and now have everything they wanted,
such
 as the CEO of Google who lived in India and moved to the USA to find better opportunities or Mark Zuckerberg the CEO of Facebook who was just a normal Harvard student.
However
, these types of cases are very rare. Even if you take all of the risks and sacrifice everything there is nothing that can make you sure that you will achieve your goals, unlike
money
.
People
 who have
money
 have access to all of the opportunities they want. Proof of
this
 is in my country if you want to get better pay some jobs want employees who speak English, only those who could pay
English
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 classes will have
this
 opportunity. Similar to
public
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 who went to private schools and could study anything they wanted. Even if you make all the effort to get something,
at the end
 of the day
money
 is the key that can define the path of your life in order to be successful.
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