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Many people no longer read newspapers or watch TV news programmes. Instead they get news about the world from the Internet. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, some
people
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 believe the
news
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 about the world on the
internet
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 or social media is more convenient and accessible than reading newspapers or watching TV
news
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 programs. In the following paragraph, both views on
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 topic will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached.
To begin
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 with, the
internet
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 and social media
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 as Facebook, Lindekin, and Twitter have several advantages. They are easy to use, reachable, and affordable. Individuals can access
news
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 from everywhere by using their smartphones. There are a variety of sources of
news
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 on the
internet
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.
For instance
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, when I want to know about new laws before they are published in a newspaper, I can search for
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 about them on the
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internet
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.
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, on some sources,
such
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 as Facebook, there is a function called "Facebook Live" to update real-time
news
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. My mother really enjoys
this
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 function because she is a big fan of the government lottery announcement. I strongly believe that the new technology of the
internet
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 is very friendly and easy to use in the present day. All of these factors convinced many
people
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 that the
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internet
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 is more convenient.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that the
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internet
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 has a few disadvantages. Nowadays,
people
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 care about ratings on social media,
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 as followers, total likes, and comments. They may create fake
news
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 or fake
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 to increase followers. They do not think about the negative effects of their
behaviors
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. The outcome of fake
news
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 is the spread of misinformation.
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, there is a very important disadvantage: if
people
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 do not buy newspapers or watch
news
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 TV programs in the future, Individuals who work for
newspapers'
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 companies will lose their jobs in the future.
To conclude
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, there are advantages and disadvantages to getting
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 from the
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internet
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. The positive development of the
internet
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 is its convenience and accessibility.
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, the negative development of the
internet
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 is the spread of fake
news
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 to individuals.
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