The diagram illustrates how to manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

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to manufacturing process for making

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from

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cane. It’s crystal clear that the

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is produced from

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cane. In the first photo we can clearly see that

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there is a growing

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canes

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, the

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grows

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between 12 – 18 months Taking a closer look at the second photo, they can

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two ways. The first one is they will use a tractor and the second one is they can do it by their selves to take them off. When they did it they ought to use a crushing machine

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juice of the

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canes

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than

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prufiying

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the juice with the limestone filter. After

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they heal the juice to become a syrup so they use

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evaporator. In the 6th

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the centrifuge separates the

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crystals to make a syrup. Taking everything into

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the

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to make

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syrup.

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sugar

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from the

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