The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs below represent
change
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changes
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in owners of households with electrical appliances between 1920-2019.
Additionally
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,
number
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the number
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of hours people do housework every week. A significant increase is shown in the first
graph
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whereas
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, the second
graph
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represents a gradual decrease. The first
graph
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presents
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shows
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that in 1920 no usage of refrigerators
were
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was
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made. It mushroomed
1940
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from 1940
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onwards. It increased
upto
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up to
100 percent till
year
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the year
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1980.
whereas
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,
use
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the use
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of washing declined during 1980.
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However
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However,
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it showed
a
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an
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increase
by
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of
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15% till 2019. The second
graph
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shows that in
1920's
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the 1920's
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aound
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around
and
50% of
household
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households
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used to do housework
such
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as washing clothes, preparing meals,
cleaning
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and cleaning
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by themselves. Which
furthermore
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decreased by 5% to 10% each year and at
last
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came to 10% by the year 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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