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The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010.

The table below shows personal saving as a percentage of personal income for selected countries in 1970, 1990 and 2010.
The table diagram depicts the citizens's
saving
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savings
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 compared with personal
salary
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salaries
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 as a
pecentage
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percentage
 in developed countries,
such
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 as Canada, France, Germany,
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etc. Among the 3 periods, it can be seen that Canada
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 the lowest
saving
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savings
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 from 1970 to 2000. From the figures,
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North
America
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 countries like Canada and
USA
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the USA
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 had the
low
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lowest
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rate
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rates
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 of
saving
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savings
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 which were just 5.6% and 8.2% in 1970 to 1.9% and 4.0% in 2000
that
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were the top lowest and secondary lowest respectively. Meanwhile, European countries
such
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 as Germany and UK had
slightly
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 changes from 13.8% and 9.2% in 1970 to 11.3% and 11.1% in 2000 respectively. All in all, France and Italy had significant
decreses
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decreases
 over the period from 18.7% and 29.5% in 1970 to 13.6% and 11.4% in 2000 respectively.

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