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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT PAYING TAXES IS BIG ENOUGH CONTRIBUTION TO THEIR SOCIETY,WHILE OTHERS THINK PEOPLE HAVE MORE RESPONSIBILITIES AS MEMBER OF SOCIETY THAN ONLY PAYING TAXES.DISCUSS BOTH VEIWS AND GIVE YOUR OPENION

#people #taxes #contribution #society #responsibilities #member #veiws #openion
people
 spend
considerable
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a considerable
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 amount of
money
for
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on
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 their
salary
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salaries
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 to pay
taxes
 to the government
for
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to
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 establish better
life styles
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lifestyles
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 in
the
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apply
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society ,
eventhough
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even though
people
earn
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do earn
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 not enough
money
 for their
day today
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day-to-day
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spenditures
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expenses
 after
contribute
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contributing
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 to
taxes
,
sothat
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apply
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I
belive
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believe
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 paying
taxes
 is not
resonable
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reasonable
 for every person who lived in the country. when
taxes
 are contributed by individuals to enhance facilities
such
 as
modern
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a modern
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 education system, maintain good health and comfortable
life style
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lifestyle
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,
while
 they work more hours to earn extra
money
 and many developed countries
used
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use
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 that
money
 to
rise
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raise
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quality
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the quality
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 of
people
,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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 state
had provided
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provide
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 free education , free health facilities and modern technology to spend
better
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a better
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 life. As an example,
United
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the United
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State
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States
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 used all tax
money
 to enrich
people
's needs
such
 as food , health and
madern
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modern
 facilities ,
while
they give
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giving
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 more attention to
development
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the development
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 of children.
However
, some
people
have
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do have
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 not enough
money
 for tax
payment
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payments
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 and they
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really
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are realy
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realy
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really
 upset about that method
due to
 some
deformeties
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deformities
while
 they
facing
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face
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high
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a high
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 cost of living,
least
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a low
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 salary and
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annual
anual
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annual
texes
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taxes
 in
conclution
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conclusion
, I
belive
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believe
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 that, each person can not
give
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make
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equal
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an equal
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 contribution
for
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to
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 government taxses
becouse
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because
 every person not earn
equal
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an equal
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amout
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amount
amounts
 of
money
.
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