In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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The improved technology these days
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efficient sources for
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to interact with one another,
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bond. It is claimed that a close
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between
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in the same community becomes rare when compared to that in the past. Personally, advanced communication alters the means of human interaction. Organising a campaign or activity for the community would encourage
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to take part;
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could help enhance their
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relationship
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among
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in the neighbourhood. To start with, prior to advanced technology, staying in a
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has become more convenient and practicable. In any kind of
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,
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(neighbours included) do not need to pay a high cost to travel to see one another, it is more convenient nowadays. Even though there are various ways to reach others easily, most
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overlook them.
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, thinking that texting a distant friend could be done at all times,
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take it later, resulting in becoming a stranger to an old neighbour.
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, some productive activity should be organised in order to bring
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in the local area to meet and socialise.
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could work well in any community as a number of
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are essential to reach the goal. Once
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come and join in, communication and interaction between them occur, which they could realise later that a
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also
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needs personal contact. In conclusion, despite relying on modern communication technology,
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in the neighbourhood could become more distant when compared to
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in the past. They would take it for granted as they choose an easier means to communicate without realising that a close
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needs human interaction. To improve
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,
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in the neighbourhood could use some special event where they all can join to create bonding, leading to a close
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