The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
The retirement age in most countries starts at 65 years old.
However
, in my country, the retirement age starts at 60 years old. Nowadays, some people
believe the government
should be responsible for providing financial support
to retirees
. While some
Correct word choice
Some
people
think individuals should save money to support
themselves when they retire. In the following paragraph, both views on this
topic will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached.
On the one hand, many people
believe that the government
should be responsible for providing financial support
to retirees
. I strongly agree with this
view point
because Correct your spelling
viewpoint
people
work when they young
, they must pay Add a missing verb
are young
tax
Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
for
the Change preposition
to
government
. So that
the Correct word choice
So
government
should providing
financial Change the verb form
provide
be providing
support
when they become eldery
. Correct your spelling
elderly
In addition
, if the government
can take care for
the population, Change preposition
of
so that
their sons and daughters, Correct word choice
apply
they
can collect money for themself and pay back Correct pronoun usage
apply
tax
to the Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
government
in the future
. For example
, in Thailand
the Add a comma
Thailand,
government
collects taxes on working-age people
to pay for retirees
benefits when they retire every month.
On the other hand
, some people
concern
with Add a missing verb
are concern
the
Correct article usage
apply
government
support
. They believe people
should have personal savings when they retire because people
should have personal plans for their future
. They should know the importance of personal saving
. Fix the agreement mistake
savings
For instance
, if people
they
know the importance of saving, they will not be in financial trouble in the Correct pronoun usage
apply
future
. If they sick
or have Add a missing verb
are sick
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
about
Change preposition
with
health
, Correct pronoun usage
their health
then
they will not have to wait for government
assistance. So that, if they can support
financial for themself
, they will have Correct pronoun usage
themselves
better
quality of life in the Add an article
a better
future
.
In conclusion, the government
should be responsible for providing support
for retirees
because people
they
pay Correct pronoun usage
apply
tax
. Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
However
, some people
think they should have personal saving
for themself.Fix the agreement mistake
savings
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