The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
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The diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing brick for building sectors.
Overall
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it is clear that
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there are seven main steps involved in
this
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process, beginning with the digging of
clay
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and ending with the transportation of new
bricks
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. In the first steps of making brick, the
clay
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is dug out of the ground by large diggers. After that, the
clay
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is put onto mental grids and through a roller and becomes small chunks.
Following
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this
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, the
clay
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is mixed with sand and water before
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mixture is turned into
bricks
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by either placing it into a mould or wire cutter. The next phase begins when the
bricks
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are put into an oven for dying from one to two days.
Next,
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dried
bricks
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are heated in kilns at moderate and high temperatures (ranging from 200 to 1300 degrees), followed by the cooling process in the chamber for two or three days and
then
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becoming the finished
bricks
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before being packaged and delivered by truck to different places where they can
used
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to for the building industry.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words clay, bricks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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