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Many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. Do you think this is a good thing?

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There are many
people
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 that
spending
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 a huge amount of
money
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 on their wedding events. I believe
this
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 behaviour is not the best way to celebrate your marriage.
This
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one time
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event
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 and use their surplus on their
honeymoon
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 to visit different places. First of all, the revenue of
weddings
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 could be extremely expensive because partners want to do the best they have ever visited before.
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, not only can
people
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 do beautiful
weddings
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 with a reasonable budget, but
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 they can enjoy their unique days.
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, there is a popular trend in Europe that couples organise
weddings
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 with only a small group of close relatives and friends.
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, they do not invite any
colleauges
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colleagues
 or distant relatives that they do not have regular interactions in their daily lives. It will be great to avoid
to spend
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 too much on distant
people
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 in your life, especially
in
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on
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 your wedding day.
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, if parters limit their budgets on the
event
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, they
can effort for
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cannot afford
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 a
honeymoon
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 in a different country or a place which usually costs
expensive
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more
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.
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Honeymoon
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A honeymoon
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 is definitely worth
to spend
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spending
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 much more
money
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 rather than
wedding
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a wedding
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 because it is an exclusive
event
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 between husband and wife.
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addition
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addition,
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 it is
also
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 popular to visit exotic islands
such
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 as Bali or Huawei which are considerably expensive for a
honeymoon
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. Spending their extra
money
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 on visiting these islands will be a great experience.
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, couples can enjoy their special visits
with
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by
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 exploring new places and cultures. In conclusion, despite the fact that many
people
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 are spending a huge amount of
money
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for
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on
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 their
weddings
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, partners should consider
to pay
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paying
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 less for a
one time
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one-time
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 celebration
event
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. From my perspective, it would be better to pay their extra
money
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to
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for
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honeymoon
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a honeymoon
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instead
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 of a crowded celebration.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extravagant
  • Lavish
  • Societal norms
  • Cultural heritage
  • Economic benefits
  • Luxurious
  • Ceremonies
  • Designer outfits
  • Unforgettable experience
  • Obligation
  • Social status
  • Memorable
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Grand
  • Expectations
  • Local economy
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