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Developing countries require international organizations' help. spme people prefer financial aid while others think practical aid and advice are better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are a majority of
nations
 which are developing and they do not have a lot of
facilitiies
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facilities
 services.
Furthermore
, they need international aid. Some people believe that financial help is very necessary but others
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 me, think that consultation is useful. I am
giong
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going
 to write about both perspectives and give my own ideas. The third world
countries
 all the time require global
coorporations'
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corporations
 assist. They do not have
convinience
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convenience
 facilities,
high quality
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high-quality
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 technology or knowledge
cause
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because
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of
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they
do
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 not able to create these tasks.
Thus
, some think it is crucial to take lots of money or
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 technology from other
countries
 in order to develop their nation.
For instance
, they cannot produce mobile
phone
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phones
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 with
perfect
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version
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 so they expect
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powerful
countries
 to give them
this
 kind of technology.
In addition
, some
nations
 do not have precious resources which they can achieve a lot of money so they require other
countries
 to give them financial help.
Others
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 individuals have better
thought
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thoughts
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to change
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about changing
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 their
nations
 and
improve
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thier
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their
 societies. They believe
thier
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their
 workers that they can make each device with
high quality
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high-quality
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of
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substances but they need some
suggestion
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suggestions
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 in order to arrange
thier
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their
 tasks.
for example
, Developing
countries
 are able to create modern cars that other
nations
 made
them
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but because they do not privilege
from
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 some furmula which is made by intelligent scientists
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they cannot construct them.
Therefore
, they think practical
assist
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 and some good advice from them can help them to improve their
nations
. I think efficient help
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can make one country independent and increase their
talented
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. In conclusion, It is true that money can modify
industry
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the industry
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 of
country
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a country
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 but
attempting by
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 useful aid from powerful
countries
 is
valusble
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valuable
invaluable
.
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