Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspective. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?
In current times,
youngesters
feel more Correct your spelling
youngsters
challeging
from study, family and Correct your spelling
challenging
work related
pressure which creates lots of detrimental effects in their life. In Add a hyphen
work-related
this
essay, I will list down cause
and give some solutions to tackle Fix the agreement mistake
causes
this
situation with some relative examples.
To commence with, students faces
various Correct subject-verb agreement
face
problmes
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problems
due to
academics
, social and commercial. Fix the agreement mistake
academic
Firstly
, from their parents and teachers
site, they expect Change noun form
teachers'
teacher's
from
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apply
youngesters
to achieve first class in their class Correct your spelling
youngsters
hence
children feel more unsecure
and Correct your spelling
insecure
pressure
. Wrong verb form
pressured
For instance
, every parents
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parent
want
to receive good grades in school from their Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
children
site. Change noun form
children's
Secondly
, sometimes students have interest
in any other extra activities Correct article usage
an interest
such
as sports, art, music and many more and they want to build their career in this type
of fields but Fix the agreement mistake
these types
due to
the high pressure from their family site
they do not achieve their ambition. Add a comma
site,
Lastly
, from
their work Change preposition
in
life
they Add a comma
life,
found
lots of work and Wrong verb form
find
unbalanced
life Correct article usage
an unbalanced
therefore
they do not find comfort
zone.
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a comfort
Furthermore
, there are some solutions to overcome this
type of hurdles in childrens
lives. family should provide guidance and knowledge to their children to become Change to a genitive case
children's
a
successful Correct article usage
apply
student
and Fix the agreement mistake
students
employee
. Fix the agreement mistake
employees
Moreover
, companies should provide more
flexible environment to new employee because after Add an article
a more
completed
their academics they want to Wrong verb form
completing
more
secure and flexible lives in Add a missing verb
have more
workplace
. Meanwhile, Add an article
the workplace
from
elder people should teach Change preposition
apply
youngesters
to how to behave with other Correct your spelling
youngsters
citizes
.
To give an Correct your spelling
citizens
cities
overveiw
, there are several factors Correct your spelling
overview
such
as commercial, social and academics
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academic
effect
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affect
childresn
lives. Correct your spelling
children
children's
However
, parents and other people should take care and
provide better Change preposition
of and
opportunity
and placement to Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
the
young human beings.Correct article usage
apply
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coherence cohesion
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